(a) While the report discusses the relationship between audit and corporate governance, there are also other issues covered (e.g. difference between internal audit and external audit and areas an Audit Committee supervises the internal audit function). It appears that you need to point out the relevance of these other issues with your BRP topic
(b) You use the Daya Bay and China Light as your example on the importance of audit to corporate governance. It appears that the proof of the relationship of these two is relatively weak (e.g. no financial information to support that the financial performance comes from the audit function). In addition, it appears that your project focuses heavily on theories and concepts with the application to real life situations occupying a much smaller portion. This may not have fulfilled the BRP requirements including research methodology and research findings
(c) It should help if key issues and arguments are grouped with key findings highlighted. Currently it is quite difficult to follow your arguments
(d) Flow of English (including presentation and grammars) could be improved